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With wings made strong
With wings made strong With wings made strong written April th, 2021 I sit in the back while you sit in the front the favored seat next to your father you so icy and cold he could have reached out and touched your body but not your soul which was flying out over the fields we drove by desperately straining to get as far away as possible with wings made strong before having to return to this body of yours to walk down halls filled with students and teachers who did not see you or the others with wings made strong. Today do you still fly out over the fields wondering if you will ever take residence in this body of yours. |
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I want to be a better poet. I think about stanzas and line breaks, what words are essential, what details just detract, what lines to repeat, what thoughts to say and not say. Everything still ends up irregular. Then eventually the need to speak wins out, and I come here and post. Thank you everyone that reads me.
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4/19/2021 5:51 am |
Chase your dream. Keep it up.
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your words make feelings of those who read them. thank you for that
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Words well written. Very nice!!
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I know I'm probably speaking heresy but I worry less about form and function and focus on feeling when writing. I completely understand your process requires something different than my way. Your work elicits empathy and understanding. That's what matters in my opinion. If I'm not being too personal, this poem seems to describe a child blessed with autism. Yes I said blessed. We may find frustration with autistic people but I like to think their minds are a unique landscape. My apologies if my inference is incorrect. As always, a pleasure to read you My name is MrWrong and I approved this comment
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